The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, anomake comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, anomake comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides information about the
number
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of business closures and
openings
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in one nation in the
year
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2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, the
number
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of stores that closed and opened has both decreased over the period.
However
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, it can be noted that the shop opening has dramatically decreased in the end. Store
openings
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were the highest in the
year
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2011 with approximately 8500.
However
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, it dropped to more than half in the following
year
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.
Openings
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started to rise again
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next two years reaching 6000 in 2014 before declining in 2015. Since
then
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, business
openings
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remained relatively the same at around 4000 and ended at around 3000, the lowest among the periods.
On the other hand
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, the
number
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of shops that closed from 2011 to 2014
were
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around 6200 to 7100. In 2015, the numbers dramatically dropped to only 500, the lowest
number
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in all years.
However
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, closures of businesses significantly rose again the following
year
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with more than 5000 shops and remained relatively the same until 2018.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, openings, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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