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the diagram belows show the co2 cycle

the diagram belows show the co2 cycle
Presented for consideration is a
cycle
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 giving information about the
cycle
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 of CO2. The most noticeable point about the
cycle
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 is that it sheds light on the contribution of CO2 beginning with the CO2 conversion into organic
carbon
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 and released back into the air throughout several stages.
To begin
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 with, the plant uses light from the sun to transform the CO2 into the organic
carbon
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 through photosynthesis reaction in the trees.
Otherwise
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, the organic
carbon
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 can be produced by decomposition of the dead animals, plants, and some waste products. After that, one part of produced
carbon
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 is converted into fossil and fossil fuel on land and another is released back into the air by respiration of the root.
Besides
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, factory emits a large amount of
carbon
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 into entered atmosphere as CO2.
Then
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 it is absorbed by plants and the
cycle
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 begins again.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cycle, co, carbon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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