The graphs show changes in spending habits of people in UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

The graphs show changes in spending habits of people in UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.
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The pie charts show changes in UK spending patterns between 1971 and 30 years later, 2001. As an
overall
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trend, increased amounts of money spent on cars, computers and eating out were made up for by drops in expenditure on food and books. In detail, food and
car
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cars
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made up the two biggest
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of expenditure in both years. Together they comprised over half of household spending in the UK. Food accounted for 44% of spending in 1971, but
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dropped by
two thirds
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to 14% in 2001.
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, the outlay on cars doubled, rising from 22% in 1971 to 43% in 2001. Other areas changed significantly. Spending on eating out doubled, climbing from 7% to 14%. The proportion of salary spent on computers increased dramatically, up from 2% in 1971 to 12% in 2001.
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, as computer expenditure rose, the percentage of outlay on books plunged from 6% to 1%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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