An American writer think that tomorrow is more important. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, there is a wide range of American writer who holds the view that
tomorrow
is more important than the present.
This
essay disagrees with
this
point of view and I will analyze several main reasons behind my disagreement. First of all, if we only care about
tomorrow
what can benefit you in
this
case
.
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People keep saying
the
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world that
tomorrow
will be better than
today
, but how can people make sure that
tomorrow
will bring the best result for you
.
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Their way of thinking is already negative they have not even started to make
today
the best day but they just think about
tomorrow
which makes no sense at all.
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, there are lots of cases , especially from teenagers addicted to their phones, immersing themselves in a virtual world. Why don't they take action in the present
.
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I believe that whatever you do
today
is always worthy
for
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tomorrow
. They should focus on
today
and make themselves proud of it
today
before
tomorrow
comes because
tomorrow
is so far away.
On the other hand
, thinking about the future does not bring
lot
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of advantage thing in life. Some people just
wasting
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their time for the future not even wanting to make the present to be as good as it has to be.
In addition
, nobody knows what is going to happen so you should be concerned about the present rather than wait or think about the future.
For example
,
today
in your computer subject you
geta c
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got a C
grade but
overall
you got 80% so, you should be proud of it.
To sum up
, I strongly believe that every day in life always has an advantage don't just wait until
tomorrow
to come.
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Work on clarifying and structuring your essay in a more logical and coherent manner. Begin by clearly stating your thesis in the introduction, followed by paragraphed arguments that support your view. Each paragraph should introduce a single idea, supported with examples or explanations.
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Your essay would benefit from more precise and relevant examples to back up your points. While you touch upon scenarios involving teenagers and grades, delve deeper into these examples or use a wider range of scenarios to make your argument more potent and persuasive.
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Make sure to carefully proofread your essay to correct grammatical errors and improve sentence structure, which will help make your argument clearer and more professionally presented.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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