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Band 6.5

You are visiting a town where you once worked. Write a friend you worked with there. Include the following in your letter: Tell your friend about life now. Give him/her details of your visit. Arrange how you can meet.

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Dear Alex, How are you? I hope you are doing great .I have been wanting to go
to
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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back to my old job in Canada, where you and I met. I have never been able to do it before . Now I have
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 opportunity. As you already know my
life
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 started to get better from
period
Add an article
the period
a period

The noun phrase period seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 of my work in America
moreover
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

; I started investing, selling clothes and much more, I bought a 2-storey house, got married and have a son and daughter. Based on
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, my
life
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 has improved slightly. I just finished all my business a couple of days ago and decided that the whole family will go to Canada. I will improve my skills there and we can meet you in our company called " Salamanders" As you know, we are still young, how about we meet at our old cafe. The location of the cafe is still in the city centre under the big bridge where we
loved
Wrong verb form
love

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb loved. Consider changing it.

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 to sit on Sundays, there is still
same
Change the article
the same

It appears that the phrase same atmosphere does not contain the correct article usage. Consider making a change.

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 atmosphere of comfort if you agree, let's move our meeting to
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 week, we can discuss a lot about our
life
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

, how you like to tell stories from
life
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

. I look forward to your reply with great enthusiasm. Kind regards, Arthur

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task achievement
To improve task response, ensure you address all parts of the prompt fully. While your letter mentions the main points, elaborating more on each point with details or examples will help enhance clarity and completeness. Consider expanding on the details of your visit and the arrangements for meeting.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, focus on logically organizing your ideas and ensuring smooth transitions between paragraphs. Use connecting words and phrases to link ideas more effectively. Additionally, consider a more consistent paragraph structure where each paragraph focuses on a single aspect of your letter.
general
Check your letter for grammatical mistakes and ensure correct punctuation and capitalization. Proper use of grammar and punctuation will not only make your letter clearer but also more professional.
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