You are visiting a town where you once worked. Write a friend you worked with there. Include the following in your letter: Tell your friend about life now. Give him/her details of your visit. Arrange how you can meet.

Dear Alex, How are you? I hope you are doing great .I have been wanting to go
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back to my old job in Canada, where you and I met. I have never been able to do it before . Now I have
this
opportunity. As you already know my
life
started to get better from
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of my work in America
moreover
; I started investing, selling clothes and much more, I bought a 2-storey house, got married and have a son and daughter. Based on
this
, my
life
has improved slightly. I just finished all my business a couple of days ago and decided that the whole family will go to Canada. I will improve my skills there and we can meet you in our company called " Salamanders" As you know, we are still young, how about we meet at our old cafe. The location of the cafe is still in the city centre under the big bridge where we
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to sit on Sundays, there is still
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atmosphere of comfort if you agree, let's move our meeting to
this
week, we can discuss a lot about our
life
, how you like to tell stories from
life
. I look forward to your reply with great enthusiasm. Kind regards, Arthur
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To improve task response, ensure you address all parts of the prompt fully. While your letter mentions the main points, elaborating more on each point with details or examples will help enhance clarity and completeness. Consider expanding on the details of your visit and the arrangements for meeting.
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Check your letter for grammatical mistakes and ensure correct punctuation and capitalization. Proper use of grammar and punctuation will not only make your letter clearer but also more professional.
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