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Nowadays,many people choose to be self-employed,rather than to work for a company or organisation.why might this be the case?what could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

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Presently
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 of working under
anyone
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 people prefer to start
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their own
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business
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businesses
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.
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 essay will discuss the probable reasons
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this
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 trend and some possible negative sides of being self-employed. The foremost causes of starting own business are the lack of
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 satisfaction and uncertainty of
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the current
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 market. It has become a very common trend that companies offer lower salaries and less benefit to the employees, which
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 dissatisfaction among the
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 holders.
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 they start independent businesses.
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, there
always
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 a Chance of losing
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 when working in
others owned
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another
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 company. In case of a company facing any difficult situation,
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 it is a common practice to terminate the resources.
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, during
covid
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COVID-19
, many people lost their
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job
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jobs
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 because
of
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companies were unable to earn their revenue. The Possible disadvantages of
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 growing phenomenon are chances of failure for individuals and organizations
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 difficulties
on
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in
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 hiring new candidates. First of all, those who are
freelancer
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freelancers
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they
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could
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 hardly manage enough
fund
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funds
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 for a new start-up, Because of financial back-up there is a good chance of failure for
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 of
set up
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set-up
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, which creates unemployed educated citizens.
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instance
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 because of technological
advancement
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advancement,
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 IT industry has boomed in Bangladesh, but research shows that most of the
start ups
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start-ups
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 closed within a year time.
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, losing
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 employee
is
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always
impact
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impacts
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 badly over a company. Sometimes they face difficulties
to find
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in finding
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 suitable
candidate
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candidates
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 for the post.
To Conclude
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, the amount of self-employment is increasing day by day because
if
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of
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 multiple reasons. But disadvantages are
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 more.

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Task Response
Your essay addresses the task directly, discussing both reasons for self-employment and its downsides effectively.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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