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The bar chart below shows the hour per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007

The bar chart below shows the hour per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007
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bar chart depicts how many
hours
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 teenagers spend on seven various activities per
week
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 over a
period
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 of 6 years (2002 to 2007).
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, The most significant time was spent
on
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watching television,
whereas
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least
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the least
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 amount of time on bowling over the given
period
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. Watching television grew dramatically from 25
hours
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 per
week
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 to around 37
hours
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 per
week
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 from 2002 to 2007 respectively, and it was the most popular activity throughout the
period
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. The next most favourite activities are watching DVDs and shopping where DVDs showed fluctuations from 2002 to 2007. The figures for DVDs started at 12
hours
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 in 2002 and reached its peak at around 17
hours
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 in 2004 before dropping to 10
hours
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at the end
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. The
hours
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 for going to pubs/discos grew from 8
hours
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 to 12 in 2004 and remained constant for
next
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the next
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 three years and
then
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 increased by 8
hours
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 in 2007.
On the other hand
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, Doing homework was the most prominent at
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starting
 with about 13
hours
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 per
week
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.
However
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, it experienced a constant decline till the year 2007.
The bowling
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 was the least popular among teenagers making its figures below 5
hours
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 over the
period
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trends
  • compare and contrast
  • increase/decrease
  • time allocation
  • shifts in popularity
  • significant changes
  • cultural factors
  • technological advancements
  • social dynamics
  • implications
  • physical/mental health
  • social development
  • leisure activities
  • recreational
  • sedentary
  • engagement
  • interaction
  • steadily
  • dramatically
  • marginally
  • consistently
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