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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The pie chart displays the percentage of
tourists
 in different regions,
while
 the table illustrates information about the average length of stay, accommodation, and main activity of those international
visitors
.
Overall
, it is evident that from the chart
tourists
 from Asia were recorded at the top of the list among the other categories.
To begin
 with,
according to
 the chart, it is clearly seen that
Australia
 was common to Asians among the others accounting for 37%. At the same time,
visitors
 from Europe seem interested in travelling to
Australia
, with about 35%.
However
, the proportion of the US shows nearly a half compared to Asia,
while
 individuals from other regions display the lowest percentage, at only a tenth. Turning to the table, surprisingly European
tourists
 spent the most days in
Australia
, at 16 days,
while
 the shortest trip accounted for Asian
visitors
, at only a week.
Furthermore
,
Europe
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in Europe
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 and other regions people prefer to live in a camp or caravan;
in contrast
, Asian and American
tourists
 choose to stay in a 5-star and 4-star hotel, respectively.
In addition
, sightseeing has become the most popular activity of guests from Asia and America.
Moreover
,
while
 European
tourists
 love to swim or sunbathe in
Australia
,
visitors
 from other zones like to do surfing as a main activity.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, visitors, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "displays" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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