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The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart displays the percentage of
tourists
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 in different regions,
while
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 the table illustrates information about the average length of stay, accommodation, and main activity of those international
visitors
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.
Overall
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, it is evident that from the chart
tourists
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 from Asia were recorded at the top of the list among the other categories.
To begin
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 with,
according to
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 the chart, it is clearly seen that
Australia
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 was common to Asians among the others accounting for 37%. At the same time,
visitors
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 from Europe seem interested in travelling to
Australia
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, with about 35%.
However
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, the proportion of the US shows nearly a half compared to Asia,
while
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 individuals from other regions display the lowest percentage, at only a tenth. Turning to the table, surprisingly European
tourists
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 spent the most days in
Australia
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, at 16 days,
while
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 the shortest trip accounted for Asian
visitors
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, at only a week.
Furthermore
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,
Europe
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in Europe
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 and other regions people prefer to live in a camp or caravan;
in contrast
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, Asian and American
tourists
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 choose to stay in a 5-star and 4-star hotel, respectively.
In addition
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, sightseeing has become the most popular activity of guests from Asia and America.
Moreover
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,
while
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 European
tourists
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 love to swim or sunbathe in
Australia
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,
visitors
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 from other zones like to do surfing as a main activity.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, visitors, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "displays" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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