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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons whererelevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons whererelevant.
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The tables provide details about the
income
 generated by
coffee
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the coffee
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 and banana industry in
five
 nations in Europe in the
year
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years
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 1999 and 2004.
Overall
, the
income
 of
coffee
 in
five
 countries has increased after
five
 years,
while
 the
income
 of bananas rose in most countries.
However
, the money generated by bananas
were
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was
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 significantly higher compared to
coffee
 in both periods. Switzerland had the highest sales of
coffee
 in 1999 with 1.8
million
pounds
 and doubled in 2004.
On the other hand
, the sales in
UK
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the UK
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 went up dramatically from 1.5 to 20
million
pounds
 after
five
 years. Belgium increased by 0.7%,
while
 Denmark and Sweden had a slight increase in 2004. With regards to bananas, the profits in Switzerland, the UK, and Belgium went up from 15, 1, 0.6
million
pounds
 to 47, 5.5, and 4
million
pounds
 in 2004, respectively.
On the contrary
, the profits in Sweden and Denmark decline after half a decade. Sweden decreased from 1.8 to 1
million
pounds
,
whild
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while
 Denmark 0.9
million
pounds
, the lowest
income
 in
banana
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the banana
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 industry in 2004.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, coffee, five, million, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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