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Some people believe that schools should choose their student according to their abilities. While other people think students with different abilities should learn together. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In the modern era, there is an ongoing debate about whether
students
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 with similar capabilities should be isolated from
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 undergraduates or not. I mostly agree with the first statement and think it can benefit them in broader areas.
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 with, advocates of schools with similar talented
students
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 tout its many advantages. When all the
students
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 are
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 in the same major,
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 can address their problems adequately.
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, they will have a better learning of specialized issues.
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, they do not study general lectures and topics which have less influence on their lives.
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, it can lead to more
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 curriculum for specialized subjects and more qualified undergraduates . In Iran,
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, high school
students
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 are separated based on their majors so they can concentrate better on their own critical subjects.
On the other hand
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, learning together can
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 scholars in various aspects.
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, it can help schools to train more social
students
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 who can communicate with others without any difficulty.
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, when I was in high school, I was
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 shy and could not speak in public but that problem was solved when I arrived university and encountered various individuals.
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, in
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 environments, scholars can learn from each other and solve most of their problems even without any
educator
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.
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, it can make the environment more competitive which can raise the status of the university among others.
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, I
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 endorse the idea of having selective schools based on abilities and think it can contribute to learning purposes and address the prevalence crises among
students
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 better compared to other learning approaches.

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task response
Be sure to fully address all parts of the task prompt. Your essay discusses the benefits of both educational approaches but could further elaborate on how these compare to support your own opinion more strongly.
task response
Try to diversify your vocabulary to prevent repetition and enhance clarity. For example, consider using synonyms for words like 'students,' 'teachers,' and 'schools' to enrich your text.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay demonstrates good structure, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. To improve coherence, make sure to use transitional words or phrases at the start of paragraphs or to link ideas.
coherence and cohesion
To enhance cohesion, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea. Within paragraphs, use examples and explanations to support your points more thoroughly.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • tailored education
  • prodigious talent
  • career paths
  • segregating
  • competitive environment
  • inclusive
  • diverse learning environment
  • peer learning
  • irrespective
  • stigma
  • lower ability group
  • balanced approach
  • cater
  • inclusivity
  • diversity
  • respect
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