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Topic: Some people say it is time to say goodbye to reading books with real paper because e-readers and e-books are available. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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 modern era, there is no doubt that
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the advancement
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advancement
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advancements
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of
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in
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techologies
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technology
are
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is
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 gradually making our
life
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lives
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 easier
such
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 as
e-boooks
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e-books
.I totally agree with the topic in spite of two factors
such
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 as cost-effective and environment-friendly.In the next paragraph, I will explain the reason
of
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 that in detail.
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 with,buying a real
book
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cost
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 a lot of money compared to
the
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apply
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online .
This
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 is because e-books only
required
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 minimal charges and more convenience to travel to any destination.
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,real
book
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collection
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collections
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 need bigger places to store and
this
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 is a
watse
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waste
 of
the
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money
while
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 digital only
need
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needs
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 minimal space to keep.
Next,
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e-reader
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e-readers
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is
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are
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 far more environment-friendly because
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this
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they
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 do not need any form of materials to produce an e-
book
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 just
the
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apply
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electronic
devides
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devices
such
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 as
Smartphone
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Smartphones
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,
laptop
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laptops
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 and
computer
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computers
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.As for the real
book
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, many
desforestation
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deforestation
needed
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needs
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 to be done so
the
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that
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 material
such
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 as wood
can
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could
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 be used to make the books.As
for
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apply
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the
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a
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 result, many wild species are in danger because they are losing their only home to survive.
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,in
malaysian
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Malaysia
, orangutan is a type of monkey that
live
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lives
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 in the forest but because of palm
tree
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trees
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desforestation
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deforestation
lead
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leads
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 to
almost
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the almost
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 extinction of
this
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 species.
On the other hand
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, some might think keeping the heritage of physical
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book
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books
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 is needed to remind our culture and
acestor
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ancestors
ancestor
.
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 that,
the
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future generations need to understand sharing a
book
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 in the library
bring
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brings
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sense
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a sense
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 of community.
Furthermore
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,
exposuring
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exposing
exposure
continuely
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continuously
 on
blue
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a blue
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 light on digital may cause eyesight
problem
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problems
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 compared to
physical
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the physical
a physical
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book
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books
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.
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, data shows that many children are wearing spectacles nowadays
due to
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 exposure
from
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to
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 digital devices. In conclusion, the merits
are
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far outweigh the demerits,especially considering the urgent need for maintaining a good ecosystem on the planet.
Therefore
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, I totally agree with the statement above by
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encouraging
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 people to read through
e-
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e-books
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book
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.

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Task Response
To improve your score in Task Response, ensure that your essay completely addresses all parts of the task. Clearly state your opinion and directly answer the question in the introduction. Then, develop your ideas further in the body paragraphs, providing more specific examples and evidence to support your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
To enhance coherence and cohesion, work on the logical flow of your ideas. Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to connect sentences and paragraphs smoothly. Also, ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea supported by examples. Organizing your essay with more clarity will make your arguments more convincing.
General
Be mindful of your grammar and punctuation as mistakes in these areas can impact the clarity of your argument and overall coherence. Practice varied sentence structures and check your work for common grammatical errors.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nostalgic value
  • sensory experience
  • convenience
  • portability
  • digital age
  • preservation
  • environment
  • reading comprehension
  • retention
  • accessibility
  • disabilities
  • tradition
  • libraries
  • interactive
  • multimedia content
  • economic aspects
  • digital eyestrain
  • blue light exposure
  • preservation of culture
  • durability
  • longevity
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