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Nowadays anyone can post news on the internet. As a result, we cannot trust information we read there. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#anyone #post #news #internet #trust #information
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an
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 internet can participate
any
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information
 on social
media
,
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, people face a serious
problem
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 the facts . In my opinion, I agree with
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 case, as
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 believe it can
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 many serious problems, and spread misleading
information
 in our world. using the internet has many effects that can reflected on our society, to give a clear example, most
of
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children have accounts in social
media
,
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 a result of it, many of them participate a misleading
information
,
therefore
, people cannot find the truth.
Although
,
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 all social
media
 apps have rules
to create
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 posts,
such
 as Facebook,
this
 serious
problem
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 spreading in our communities until now.
however
, we can do many things to reduce
this
problem
 to spread more and more
Therefore
, there are many ways that can help us to
products
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protect
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 our society, to illustrate,
ours
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 government have to make strict laws that criminalize anyone who
is share
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 misleading
information
 in our community, I believe that way can contribute to
reduce
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this
problem
.
In addition
, social
media
 websites have
to
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strict laws that ban any human who is under 18
year
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 old. If we make an effort, we will
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 to solve
this
 crisis as soon as possible. Online highlights the importance of enhancing public awareness about critical analysis skills and source verification.
Additionally
, digital platforms and governments should adopt measures to combat the spread of misinformation and enhance
information
 transparency.
This
 will contribute to building a more trustworthy digital
media
 environment, increasing confidence in online content.
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structure
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language usage
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content
Provide more specific, real-world examples to support your arguments. This makes your essay stronger and more convincing.
language accuracy
Work on spelling, grammar, and punctuation. Errors in these areas can distract from your message and reduce the clarity of your ideas.
task response
Reflect more deeply on the essay prompt and ensure your response fully addresses all aspects of the question. Expand your analysis and offer balanced viewpoints where appropriate.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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