The table shows how export values of diffirent items changedfrom 2009 to 2010

The table shows how export values of diffirent items changedfrom 2009 to 2010
The table depicts the changes in
export
vaules
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values
value
of
equipment
,
telcecommunity
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telco community
,clothing, manufacturing,
metals
and
overall
from 2009 to 2010.
Overall
, the most significant change was seen in the
export
of
metals
while
the least in
equipment
. The
export
value of clothing
along with
manufacturing decreased in a year. In the case of clothing and manufacturing, there was a decline of 17% and 27% respectively.
On the other hand
, in 2009, The figures for
equipment
were the highest at 10.3, followed by telecommunity with 7.9, which in the next year grew to 11.6 and 12.7 correspondingly. In 2010, The most dramatic change was seen in the number of
metals
, where numbers grew twice as
it
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used to be in 2009. Clothes showed a number less in
this
year.
However
, the
overall
export
value increased by 6.4 from 2009 to 2010. In terms of changes, On the positive
side
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an upward trend was observed in the case of
equipment
, telecommunication, and
metals
while
at the same time a negative trend in clothing and manufacturing.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words export, equipment, metals with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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