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Writing Samples
Band 4

You have just won two tickets to a concert and want to invite your friend to go with you.Write a letter to your friend. In the letter: give details about the concert describe how you won the tickets explain why you have chosen your friend to go with you.

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Dear Guli , How are you? I hope you are enjoying your holiday in the attractive city where
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I live. Anyway, I am writing to invite you to the
concert
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 of the rap
music's
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music
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 king who is Eminem. Actually, I haven'
t
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 got extra money to buy
ticket
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tickets
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 for some kind of
concerts
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concert
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 or
entertainments
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entertainment
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.
Last
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 week , I played a
lottery
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 game with my
neighbor
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. At
first,
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I didn'
t
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 have any plan
for
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to
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 buy
lottery
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. But Jack suggested
me
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I
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to
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buy it and take a risk. After
that
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 I bought
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lottery
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a lottery
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 with good value
of
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money and that money
given
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 to me for
a
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lunch by my father.
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, I didn'
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 wait for any prize.
However
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, I was surprised
with
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 yesterday's unbelievable information that's my award for the
lottery
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's number. If I remember rightly, you used to love listening
rap
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to rap
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musics
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music
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, especially your
favorite
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favourite
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 singer
is
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Eminem too. That's why, I suddenly wanted to invite you
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such
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as a partner with me to go to the
concert
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. I hope
,
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the best moments are waiting for us
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while
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at
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 the
concert
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that is
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 going to
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 tomorrow evening.
Additionally
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, your
invited
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 to my city is good for me
also
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. Because all of my family members, and other friends don'
t
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 like rap music.
And they
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 said
that is
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difficult
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a difficult
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types
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type
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 of music to understand the words. And I haven'
t
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 got any options, except you. I hope you will go to the
concert
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 with me . Please let me know your answer as soon as possible.
Your
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 sincerely , Nozigul

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Structure
Ensure your letter has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion to enhance readability and coherence.
Paragraphing
Use clear and concise paragraphs, each focusing on a single idea, to improve the flow of information and maintain the reader's attention.
Content
To improve task response, make sure all parts of the prompt are fully addressed. Include more detail about the concert, such as the date, venue, and any special activities planned, to make the letter more informative.
Tone
Adopt a tone that is appropriate for writing to a friend, which can be informal but should still be respectful and enthusiastic to fully convey your excitement and the significance of the event.
Grammar and Vocabulary
Correct grammar and spelling errors, and use a varied vocabulary to effectively communicate your message and make the letter more engaging.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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