You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter • explain your situation • describe your problems • tell him/her when you think you can start.

Dear Steven, I hope you are doing well. I am writing

this

letter about the start date of my job as a laboratory technician at ALS, but there is a problem arising in our house. As I mentioned in the interview, currently I am working part-time at my uncle's garden. Unfortunately, early

this

morning, he had to rush to the hospital because of the severe pain of the kidney stone.

According to

the doctor he has to be in the hospital for at least 3 days under supervision.

Hence

, I have to take care of the garden during his absence.

Moreover

, during my hard times, he not only helped me with the job but

also

he was giving me bonus tips for my college fees. Now

this

is the time when he needs my support

while

he is not able to run his business for a few days. I am supposed to join the office on 13th May but seems like I can start from 16th May

instead

That is

the early date I am able to join my new position at ALS. I look forward to hearing back from you. Yours faithfully, Janki.

Submitted by jankibrahmbhatt2411 on Sat Mar 30 2024

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Coherence and Cohesion

It's important to keep each paragraph focused on a single idea. Your letter does a great job of this, with each paragraph serving a clear purpose.

Task Achievement

The letter effectively uses a formal tone suitable for communication with a new employer, which is excellent. However, consider using 'will' instead of 'am able to' for commitments to sound more definite and confident.

Task Response

The letter clearly explains the situation, describes the problems, and provides a precise date when you can start the job, effectively meeting the task's requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion

Your use of formal greeting and closing in the letter suits the context of communicating with a new employer, showcasing good awareness of tone.

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

194 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter • explain your situation • describe your problems • tell him/her when you think you can start.

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