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Some experts suggest people a method to solve the environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuels and all vehicles. To what extent do you agree with this point? and make comparisons where relevant.

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In today's world, environmental issues, which are becoming more and more severe, raise considerable public concerns. Some authorities have provided a solution to address the environmental problem of increasing the price of
fuel
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 and all
vehicles
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. From my perspective, price increases could indeed benefit the environment;
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,
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 cannot solve the problem alone. Admittedly, fuels and
vehicles
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 with a higher price would result in a reduction in the utility of people since they are prone to being thrifty.
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 may mitigate the greenhouse gas emissions resulting from the operation of gasoline cars. Meanwhile, as the demand for
fuel
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 decreases, so does the extraction of
fuel
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, thereby reducing the
pollution
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 generated during the process of mining.
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, it can promote the revolution in renewable energy. It not only facilitates the development of renewable energy
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 but
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 enables citizens to choose a more energy-efficient way.
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,
pollution
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 can be controlled effectively, especially air
pollution
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.
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, it is impossible to tackle all the environmental issues in
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 way.
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 environmental issues are diverse, from
water
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 to the atmosphere, the majority of the damaging consequences of fuels and
vehicles
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 are merely air
pollution
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.
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, over-utilization of
water
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 is
also
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 detrimental to the environment. Even though two-thirds of the earth is ocean, only a minority is accessible for daily life. If humans insist on consuming
water
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 without restriction, the
water
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 resources will be exhausted.
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 issue cannot be easily dealt with by increasing the cost of
fuel
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 and
vehicles
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.
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 why environmental problems can only be dealt with if we take a variety of approaches, not just one way of raising
fuel
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 and vehicle prices. In conclusion, there is no doubt that making petrol, gasoline, and
vehicles
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 powered by fuels more expensive has a positive influence on the atmosphere.
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 other categories of environment,
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 as
water
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, should be tackled by other methods.

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