Some people get into debt by buying things they don`t need and can`t afford. What are the reasons for this behavior? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?
Residents of the country spend their money irresistibly increasing loans.
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the negative
such
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educating
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is cause for having unreasonable consumers
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consumer
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of interest rate and credit terms at all. Add an article
the meaning
That is
the main reason of
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increasing
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the increasing
debts
amount.
The best way to reduce financial illiteracy is to teach basic financial skills. Change the noun form
debt
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the appearing
free
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apply
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, Danes have got the lowest level of debts
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debt
according to
current social policy.
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the reasons
reasons
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task response
Address the prompt more directly. The essay briefly mentions reasons for the behavior and actions to prevent the problem but lacks depth. Expand on each point with more detailed explanations and examples.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay with clear paragraphs for introduction, body, and conclusion. Within paragraphs, ensure each sentence flows logically to the next, using linking words effectively for coherence.
task achievement
Support your main points with specific examples. While you mention statistics and the Danish example, providing more detailed examples and explanations can strengthen your argument.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite