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Flow chart illustrates the production of coloured plastic paper clips in a small favtoy.

Flow chart illustrates the production of coloured plastic paper clips in a small favtoy.
The shown flow chart demonstrates the steps involved in producing various coloured
plastic
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 paper
clips
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 manufactured in a
small scale
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small-scale
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 industry.
Overall
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 , there are mainly seven stages involved in making
clips
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 . Some work is done by machinery
as well as
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 some work is done by humans .
To begin
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 with ,
plastic
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 is heated to convert it
in
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to
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molten
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a molten
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 state .
Then
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 the molten
plastic
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 is poured
in
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into
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 different coloured moulds to make various coloured
clips
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 . There are three types of coloured moulds and They are
of
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apply
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red , blue and yellow in colour. When different colouring
clips
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 are made
then
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 they
goes
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go
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 for two types of checking. First is quality control and second is
check
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checking
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 for strength which is done by machine
and
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apply
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some bad quality
of
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apply
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clips
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 are rejected and only better ones are approved.
Further
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, the
clips
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 are sorted by
hands
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hand
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 to separate
mixed coloured
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mixed-coloured
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 and
single coloured
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single-coloured
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clips
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 .
Following
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this
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 , the
clips
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 are
one
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once
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 again checked for quality
as well as
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 for mixed or single colours .
Lastly
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, the packing is done and
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finally
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finally,
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 the
plastic
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 paper
clips
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 are despatched to the shops.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words plastic, clips with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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