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write about advantage and disadvantage of CCTV cameras

#advantage #cctv #cameras
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Technology has provided benefits to humanity in security aspects, from patrolling criminality to broadcasting entertainment events. For good or bad, CCTV cameras have come to never return back. In
this
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 the advantages and disadvantages of these perpetual devices.
To begin
 with, CCTV cameras brush up the safety departments as a deterrent to potential burglars. Its particular pervasive presence provides evidence in
real time
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during
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all day and night in case of robbery.
For instance
, nine of ten cases of people
catched
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 committing burglary have been prosecuted thanks to technological evidence.
Nonetheless
, CCTV recorders have issues
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 some factors, one of them is the quality resolution,
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 depends primarily
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capacity
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 of the memory card and the quality of the board.
Secondly
,
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the
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 social point of view, there
are
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 legislation that
forbid
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 the free use of
being recorded
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 on behalf
human
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 rights and privacy. As a sample, in 2014 a thief sued an important shopping mall branch for keeping in video without permission,
as a result
, he won and received a big quantity reward.
To sum up
, there are advantages and disadvantages, but people are even more involved in that technology.
While
 it is true that troubles
such
 as blind spots and bad footage are widely known, times are changing constantly and soon or later that problems, including the social ones, will be overcome to guarantee
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surveillance of quality and safety for humanity.
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Task Achievement
To boost your score in Task Achievement, try to provide more balanced coverage on advantage and disadvantage discussions. Elaborate both points with equal depth and detail. Additionally, ensure that each paragraph directly addresses the prompt with clarity. Using more specific examples relevant to CCTV's advantages and disadvantages could help strengthen your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
For Coherence and Cohesion, aim for smoother transitions between ideas and paragraphs. While your essay has a logical structure, using a wider range of linking words and phrases could enhance the flow. Also, ensure that each paragraph maintains a clear focus on a single main idea, supported by relevant examples or explanations. This will help in making your essay more cohesive and easier to follow.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surveillance
  • pervasive
  • deterrent
  • apprehension
  • prosecution
  • infringes
  • footage
  • patrolling
  • efficiency
  • malfunctions
  • blind spots
  • commercial context
  • surveillance culture
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