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The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates information about the amount of three types of spreads
consumption
,between 1981 and 2007.
overall
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,it is clear to see that
although
 low fat and reduced spreads trends rose dramatically ,the margarine and butter fell over the period. Looking more closely at the data,the
consumption
 of butter was 142
grams
,before a significant drop to 70
grams
 in 1996,there was
then
 a slight decrease to 50
grams
 in 2007. Compared with another trend,
the
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 margarine
consumption
 was 90
grams
 in 1981,after a slight fluctuation to 100
grams
 in 1991,the trend remained unchanged
on
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at
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 100
grams
 in 1996,
from
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and from
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then
 on,the
consumption
 of margarine fell significantly to 40
grams
 in 2007. Showing a complete contrast ,the low fat and reduced spreads was mere 10
grams
 in 1996,
then
 the trends soared to a peak of 85
grams
 in 2001,
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 2007 ,the
consumption
 fell back to 70
grams
 . In conclusion, the need for three types of spreads has completely changed over 26 years
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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