The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000.

The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000.
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The bar chart compares the percentage of Gross Domestic Product made by the IT
field
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and the
Service
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industry of the UK during the 1992-2000 years period.
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, there was a gradual soar in the IT
field
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GDP except for a slight drop,
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, the
Service
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industry had a steady increase too.
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, these two snippets of the GDP of the UK differ in growth they had. The IT sphere had risen a little over twice as much as it used to be in 1992,
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the
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indicator had risen twice the time exactly. In 2000 the IT
field
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had slightly over fourteen percent in comparison with the
Service
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sphere where the percentage was less by six percent.
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, the IT indicators had a year where the numbers plummeted, in 1996, to be specific. Meanwhile, the
Service
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field
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had growth without any wild fluctuations throughout the period. It is worth mentioning, that in 1996 two indicators had the smallest gap between them.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words field, service with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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