the two pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981 and 1991.

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The diagram illustrates the fluctuations in expenditures by UK

college

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colleges

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in two different periods of 1981 and 1991. Regarding the first chart (1981), teachers had the highest ratio with respect to the others.

In addition

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, insurance had the

last

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position by about 2

percent

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per cent

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. In the middle places, there were other,

resources

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and

last

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but not least furniture and equipment.

Although

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both

resources

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books and furniture equipment were held in the middle places, they had the same

value

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. In regard to the second year of record (1991), still teachers had the first position but

this

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time with a higher

value

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of 50

percent

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per cent

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. In the second place, we have

other

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others

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and it was closely followed by the

resources

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. Insurance kept its place during these two years and it is in the

last

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position on

the

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apply

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both charts.

Overall

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, it was clearly shown that the

value

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of all the components shifted up in 1998 compared to 1991.Even though the

resources

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and other workers had the same

value

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in1981

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in 1981

, they did not have the same

value

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in 1991.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words resources, value with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

176 words

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More students decided to take a part-time job when they go into universities. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?