The pie charts below show the devices people in the age 18 -25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.

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The pie charts illustrate the usage percentage of six different devices (Mobile

phone

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Laptop

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Laptops

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Tablet

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, Desktop

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computers

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, Flat-screen

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TVs

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, and Conventional

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) to watch

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by young people between the ages of 18 and 25

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in two different

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2009 and 2019.

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, in 2009, conventional

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constituted the main device to watch

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in 2019 it was Falt-screen

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, the least used

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tablets in 2009 and Conventional TVs in 2019. There was a major difference in the percentage of the preferred device in 10

years

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. The percentage of Conventional

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, which was 34% in 2009, decreased significantly by 30% in 2019.

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, laptop and desktop computers, that was 20% and 18% respectively, fell to 12% for both in 10

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. The mobile phone,

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, rose from 15% to 26%.

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, for both flat-screen TVs and tablets, there was a major increase, from 8% to more than a quarter for flat-screen TVs,

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tablets went up from 5% to approximately a fifth in 2019.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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The pie charts below show the devices people in the age 18 -25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.

Most schools give their students grades based on their performance. Why do so many schools utilize this method of student evaluation? In what ways does this affect students?

"Prevention is better than cure." Out of a country's health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures.

Task 2: Some people think hosting major international sporting events brings a lot of advantages to a country, while others believe there are more disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

You are going to teach English to your friend’s child. Write a letter to your past English teacher to ask if you can borrow some books from him/her. In your letter tell your teacher about the child; say when and where you will teach the child; explain what books you would like to borrow.

Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.