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It Is Better For Students To Live Away From Home During Their University Studies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#students #home #university #studies
There is no denying the fact that nowadays living out said for
students
 has become
common
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 trend.
While
 it is a commonly held
belife
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belief
 that
students
 their living away to seek good opportunities
their
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they're
they are
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 more successful.There is
also
 an argument that opposes it.In my
opinino
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opinion
,I consider that living
in
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at
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the
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apply
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home
better
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is better
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 than sitting down in a
forigen
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foreign
 place.
To begin
 with,
students
those
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living alone
they
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experience difficult circumstances in their
life
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lives
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 in many aspects.In
othere
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other
 words,most
of
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students
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the students
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 rely
on in
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on their families to afford
budget
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a budget
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 in order to focus
in
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on
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 their school,but those
students
 who
living
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 in abroad
they
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apply
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wouldn't be able to allocate
budget
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a budget
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.
In addition
,pupils working and studying
in
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at
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 the same time
they
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have highly
streesful
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stressful
life
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lives
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 and poor life
condition
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conditions
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.
For example
,
According to
 the
last
 study in
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the USA
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USA
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USA,
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 the majority of
students
those
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who
working
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work
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 beside study
having
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have
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 less educational attainment verses those not working. Another point to consider
,
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is,Students
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Students
they
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who
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living
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live
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 away
could not
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cannot
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 find time to do household
such
 as
,
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clean,cooking and
grabg
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grab
groseries
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groceries
 from
supermarket
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the supermarket
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.It is
also
 possible to say that
they
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the
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 mainstream
of
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students
 are suffering and depressed
cause
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because
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 they did not have
self-relliance
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self-reliance
 in order to
achive
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achieve
 their
goal
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goals
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.
Moreover
,
although
 many universities
they
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apply
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have
health
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healthy
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restaurant
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restaurants
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 to encourage
puplis
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people
 to eat
their
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they
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 are empty
,
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because they prefer fast food rather than
health
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 food.
For instance
 most
of
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students
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the students
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they
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apply
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have
bad
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a bad
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 diet
habite
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habits
habit
 because they
did
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do
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 not have time to cook at home. In conclusion,There are no easy answers to
this
 question.On
blance
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balance
,
However
,I tend to believe studying abroad is a hard decision it would be better enrolling in
the
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 university inside your city.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independence
  • personal responsibility
  • household chores
  • cultivates
  • social skills
  • broadens one's network
  • diverse cultures
  • homesickness
  • emotional distress
  • financially burdensome
  • utilities
  • stress and distraction
  • future transitions
  • adaptable
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