In many countries, some people earn very high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country. Others believe that the government should not allow people to earn salaries above a certain level. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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structure
Ensure your essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Begin with a general statement, present both views, then state your opinion. Conclude by summarizing your main points and opinion.
task response
Discuss both views thoroughly before presenting your opinion. Make sure to explore reasons why high salaries might be considered beneficial and why some argue for a salary cap. Conclude with a reasoned opinion backed by examples.
coherence and cohesion
Use paragraphs to organize your ideas clearly. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea, supported by examples or further explanation. Transition smoothly between paragraphs to maintain coherence.
language use
To enhance cohesion, use linking words such as 'however', 'moreover', and 'therefore' to connect ideas. Also, ensure consistency in verb tense and point of view throughout your essay.
examples
Provide specific examples to support your arguments. These illustrate your points and make your essay more convincing. For example, you might mention countries with no salary cap and discuss their economic status or social inequality.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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