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Learning English is important? Do you agree or disagree ?

#english
English
 is becoming a more used
language
although
 it was admitted as a global
language
 all around the world. Every young
people
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have
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eagerness
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for studying
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to study
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English
 like natives. I think the same that learning
English
 has no negative factions. Population from all countries are
learing
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learning
English
due to
indenpensable
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indispensable
language
 than others. If you have
ambition
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 to learn
English
 it
does
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 not challenging. If you do not desire to study
English
 you do not have to
force
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.
Moreover
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 you are more likely to achieve your goals
with
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English
.
In addition
 to
this
 some
people
 just study
English
 by themselves and some
people
 try to get a certificate to study in foreign universities and work in reputable jobs. If you want to speak like a native in
English
 you have to
communicating
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 with experienced speakers. There are several
way
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ways
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 of studying
English
 naturally
such
 as watching movies, listening to
musics
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music
kinds of music
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 and reading books.
Learing
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Learning
language
 is momentous
due to
 it is vital for travelling to sightseeing places and meeting
people
 around the world. If you learn
English
 you can speak without difficulties with tourists and you do not need
guide
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a guide
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 where you go to relax. Altogether there is no worse part to
learing
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learning
learn
English
 even should come first who have a dream to see the world.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lingua franca
  • multilingual
  • proficiency
  • prerequisite
  • cultural literacy
  • diplomacy
  • globalization
  • innovation
  • cross-cultural communication
  • academic research
  • linguistic barrier
  • job market
  • multinational
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