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Some people say, it's a waste of time to plan for the future. We should live in the present. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#people #waste #time #plan #future
There is an opinion that
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 planning is useless and it is more vital
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 on
present
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 day. Personally, I disagree that
future
 planning is
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 of time. It is equally essential to pay attention to the present
moment
as well as
 plan for the
future
life
. First of all, no one knows
that
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what
happens
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in
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a
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 current
moment
 and
any
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 real change is possible right
in
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this
moment
.
This
 is the reason why every person
focus
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 on
recent
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 day.
In addition
, only being
at
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in
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 the present
moment
 people are able to experience total happiness and
contented
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. Actually, the past and the
future
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 not exist and a present
moment
 is all we have.
However
, planning for
future
 activities is crucial
out of
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forward looking plan
help
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 us to set a goal and frame our
future
life
as well as
 a current
moment
. Say that recent
moment
, I used to write
weekly
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a weekly
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 schedule for each and every day of a week and
this
 helped me significantly in my studies and my daily productivity routine.
As a result
, I
was feel
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 super new
me
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to me
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in
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this
moment
that
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of
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 doing
pilate
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 and yoga.
Additionally
, in
evening
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 I did
meditation
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a meditation
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 that
improving
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 my
physically
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 body and e.g. Second of all, not having any extra slate for the
future
 makes the enjoyable
moment
 of our
life
.
That is
 to say, if do not make plans for years to come,
this
 not only
create
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 the perfect condition but it
also
help
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 to create
memorable
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a memorable
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 time for us. In conclusion, I strongly believe that living
with
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today,
it
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can be more handy
to make
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in making
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life
 happier and unforgettable.
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