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The bar charts below provide information about percentages of students who are proficient in foreign language in different countries.

The bar charts below provide information about percentages of students who are proficient in foreign language in different countries.
#bar #information #percentages #students #language #countries
This charts
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These chart
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 show the
languange
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language
skill
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skills
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base
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based
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 on
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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among
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in
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 six countries, two of
its
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them
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 are located in Europe and the rest of
its
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them
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 are part of
Asian
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the Asian
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 Continent. 
According to
 the information, more
of
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apply
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Indian
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Indians
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 are mastering
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the fogeign
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fogeign
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foreign language
languange
 and it shows that almost 70 per cent
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of female
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female
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females
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 in
india
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India
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 are more mastering other
languanges
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languages
then
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than
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the
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apply
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male
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males
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 do. The second country which
also
 mastering other
languanges
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languages
 is Romania, again female has the most
powerfull
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powerful
 for using or speaking foreign
languange
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language
languages
. The
last
 three countries which has
mastering
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mastered
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languange
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language
 sequentially are Vietnam, Russia, Thailand, and China. The unique thing
appears
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that appears
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 in the bar chart is
female
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females
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is
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apply
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constatly
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constantly
has
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have
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 the biggest impact in five
country
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countries
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 for mastering the language.
Although
male
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males
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 in Thailand
are having
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have
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 a good
languange
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language
 skill
then
the
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apply
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female
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females
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 do.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words languange with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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