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Finding it hard to remember important facts and figures? Improve your memory in 10 weeks with our Memory Course. Places are limited and the course is available for only a short time. Apply in writing to: You see the above advertisement for a course designed to help improve your memory. Write a letter to the organizer of the course. In the letter give some background information about yourself explain your own problems and why you would like to do the course enquire about the methods used on the course enquire about course fees and dates

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I am writing
this
 letter to know more about your program and could you give me some
information
. Well, let me tell you about my background
information
. Actually, I am working at the engineering firm as a manager and our firm specialist in designing security systems in apartments and public places
such
 as Zoopark and museums. Well in my free time, I do physical exercises because I believe exercises could help the health of my brain and memory and provide to balance between my work and my life. But recently I have
problems
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 with my memory
such
 as forgetting some
information
 about numbers and names. But recently I have had some issues
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in
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 my memory
such
 as forgetting all the
information
 which was from several months
in addition
 to that, I have had a recently huge headache that affected my job so, I need to do
this
course
 perhaps
this
course
 help me. I would like to know about some
information
 in
this
course
such
 as your management and method in
this
course
 and
finally
 the cost.
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Greeting and Closing
Start your letter with a proper greeting, such as 'Dear [Course Organizer's Name or Title],' to make it feel more personal and appropriate.
Greeting and Closing
Include a proper closing statement, like 'Yours sincerely' followed by your name, to conclude your letter in a respectful manner.
Logical Structure
Organize your letter with clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of your enquiry. For instance, one paragraph for background, another for explaining your issues, and separate paragraphs for each question about the course.
Single Idea per Paragraph
Make sure each paragraph sticks to one main idea. This will help in making your letter clearer and more organized.
Complete Response
Your letter covers the needed aspects of the task but could be more detailed in explaining why you're interested in the course and what specific outcomes you're hoping for.
Suitable Writing Tone
Adopt a more formal tone consistent throughout the letter. Avoid casual phrases and ensure correct use of professional language.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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