ore and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

Wild life
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Wildlife
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extinction is becoming a major concern all over the
wolrd
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world
because it can damage
the
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biodiversity which in
tern
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turn
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can cause a lot of unchangeable problems. Some of the
animals
are already extinct
while
some
on
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are on
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the verge of being extinct.
This
essay will discuss
about
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the reasons behind the extinction
as well as
possible solutions to it. The primary reason for
animals
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animal
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extinction is
loss
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the loss
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of natural habitat
due to
deforestation.
The human
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Human
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beings are destroying natural
forest
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forests
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to get the land for
indutrialization
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industrialization
industrialisation
, which forces the local
animals
to leave their homes. Sometimes they end up
loosing
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losing
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their
live
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lives
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in the process of finding new
habitat
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habitats
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.
For example
, some of the wild
animals
like
lion
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lions
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and
cheetah
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cheetahs
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have been seen outside of the
forests
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forest
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areas in most
of
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Indian villages;
as a result
of human
interferances
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interference
interferences
in their natural homes.
This
issue can be solved with the help of
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the governmnet
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governmnet
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government
. The
governmnet
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government
should make rules and
reguations
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regulations
such
as
ban
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a ban
the ban
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on hunting to save endangered
animals
.
For example
,
according to
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the Wild
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Wild life
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Wildlife
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act
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, India banned cutting off trees to protect the flora and fauna.
Moreover
,
government
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the government
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should educate people about the necessity of
animals
to maintain the cycle of life on
earth
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Earth
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. It can be done at schools, colleges and local community
centers
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centres
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.
For instance
, most of the schools in India specifically teach about
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the enironment
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enironment
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environment
as a separate subject.
Therefore
, more and more people are being educated about the
importanc
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importance
of
animals
. In conclusion, Destruction of forests is the main cause of the deaths of wild
animals
.
Therefore
, educating the population makes a lot of difference in protecting the
animals
.
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