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You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn’t able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in the hospital, telling him about the match

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Dear Suraj, Hope you to find
this
 letter finds you well.
Im
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I am
 writing to tell you about the cricket match which
held
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was held
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 between
team
youth
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Youth
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 and
team
tigers
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Tigers
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. I am very
exciting
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excited
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 to let you know that our
team
 tigers won the match.
Match
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The match
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 was full of suspences and twists. Even in the
last
 over nobody could predict
that
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apply
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who wins.
Match
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The match
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 starts with
toss
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the toss
a toss
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. Unfortunately, we
lose
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lost
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 the toss and
other
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the other
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team
 decided to bat first.
In
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At
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 the
begining
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beginning
 of the game,
team
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the team
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 youth performs really well. But we
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Grammar & Punctuation
Ensure grammatical accuracy and use appropriate punctuation. For example, 'Hope you to find this letter finds you well' should be 'I hope this letter finds you well,' and 'Im' should be 'I’m' or 'I am.'
Verb Tense Consistency
Maintain consistency in verb tenses throughout your letter to enhance readability. For instance, 'I am very exciting' should be 'I am very excited' to remain consistent with the past tense narrative.
Paragraph Structure
To improve the structure, focus each paragraph on a single idea. One paragraph can describe the match's outcome, another can detail key moments, and a concluding paragraph can express your well wishes or anticipation for the injured friend’s return.
Emotional Engagement
Incorporate emotional elements or more details about how the team felt during the match and how much you missed having your friend there. This can make the letter more personal and engaging.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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