Part 2 To succeed in a business, one needs to know maths. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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working in an economic field requires a deep knowledge of maths.

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it is believed that people need to know maths to succeed in a business, I partially agree with

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will need

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as a tool to solve business problems.

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, science can help to solve sophisticated equations,

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can use maths to calculate incomes, outcomes or the salaries of employees and manage the number of employees.

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, they can count the profits those employees bring and

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give reasonable wages to them.

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, learning

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will allow people to have a creative mind and improve critical thinking. Undoubtedly, a

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issues in the fastest and most intelligent ways.

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, some undergraduates confirmed that they did not complete any class or school, but still come off well. It might be true in a few cases, but in reality, they must have little knowledge

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a successful result in employment, a company must have accountants and managers in the economy, but

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a leader who has trustable

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and strategies to bring their team to come up with extraordinary solutions. If people make a low or medium transaction, they would not need to use complex calculations. But if they own a high dimension of the company, they might hire experts for help. In conclusion,

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is not only the way to succeed in a trade but

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is crucial when they want to start a business. (272 words)

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Part 2 To succeed in a business, one needs to know maths. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people think young people are not suitable for important position in the government while other people think it is a good idea for young people to take on the positions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Overall, the widespread use of the internet has a mostly positive effect on life in today’s world.

Professionals such as doctors, nurses and teachers should be paid more than sports and entertainment personalities. To what extent do you agree?

Some people think that success is the best way to measure intelligence. Others believe that it can be measured through other useful parameters. Do you agree or disagree?

Very few schoolchildren learn about the value of money and how to look after it, yet this is a critical life skill that should be taught as part of the school curriculum. Do you agree or disagree?