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The table shows information about spending money on some items in 2002.

The table shows information about spending money on some items in 2002.
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The table provides data on consumer spending in five different countries—namely Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and Turkey—across three
categories
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: Food/Drinks/Tobacco, Clothing/
Footwear
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, and
Leisure
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/
Education
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, for the year 2002. It is immediately apparent that Ireland had the highest percentage of consumer spending on Food/Drinks/Tobacco, with 28.91%,
while
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 the lowest spending in
this
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 category was recorded in Sweden, at 15.77%.
On the other hand
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, Italy led in the Clothing/
Footwear
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 category, with 9.00% of spending, which contrasts with Sweden, which had the lowest percentage at 5.40%. In the case of
Leisure
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/
Education
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, Turkey showed the highest consumer spending at 4.35%,
whereas
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 Spain had the lowest at 1.98%. It is
also
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 noteworthy that the percentages for
Leisure
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/
Education
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 were generally lower compared to the other
categories
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 across all five countries.
Overall
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, each country displayed a unique spending pattern across the
categories
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.
For instance
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,
while
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 Turkey had the highest spending
in
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on
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 both Food/Drinks/Tobacco and
Leisure
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/
Education
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, it had relatively lower spending on Clothing/
Footwear
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.
Conversely
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, Italy,
while
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 having the highest expenditure on Clothing/
Footwear
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, did not top the list in the other
categories
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words categories, footwear, leisure, education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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