There are several advantages to hosting an international sporting event. There are disadvantages too. Discuss both views and state your opinion.
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event
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infrastructure
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apply
country
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also
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event
itself.
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increase
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enhance
enhances
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country
national pride and unity
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country's
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itself
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themselves
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be started
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cost of organizing events for the Change preposition
apply
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host
country
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country
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countries
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let us
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that
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were held
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back days
indonesia
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Indonesia
infrastrusture
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infrastructures
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Introduction
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Logical Structure
Addressing both views in separate paragraphs followed by a paragraph of your opinion makes the essay more organized.
Coherence & Cohesion
Utilize conjunctions and transitional phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs, e.g., 'However,' 'Moreover,' 'In conclusion.'
Conclusion
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Supporting Details
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General
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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