The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-tim e work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-tim e work did after leaving college in 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate the proportion of
graduate
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and postgraduate pupils in the UK after finishing college, except for full-time jobs in 2008. It can be seen that
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the majority of both
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continued their education,
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the lowest number of
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would like to go to voluntary jobs. In the year 2008, There were the highest numbers of
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studying
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in both groups, standing at nearly 30
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graduate
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students
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and about 2.7
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advanced
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.
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the proportion of
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students
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opting for part-time jobs stood at over 17
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, 8 times as much as that of postgraduate
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, the figures for unemployment of final
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was approximately over 16
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, equivalent to over a tenth of the figure for graduates.
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, the number of
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students
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participating in volunteer work was 2.5
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, which was higher than that of professors, with only 345.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words graduate, students, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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