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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-tim e work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-tim e work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate the proportion of
graduate
 and postgraduate pupils in the UK after finishing college, except for full-time jobs in 2008. It can be seen that
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 the majority of both
students
 continued their education,
while
 the lowest number of
students
 would like to go to voluntary jobs. In the year 2008, There were the highest numbers of
students
 studying
further
 in both groups, standing at nearly 30
thousand
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graduate
students
 and about 2.7
thousand
of
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advanced
students
.
While
 the proportion of
graduate
students
 opting for part-time jobs stood at over 17
thousand
, 8 times as much as that of postgraduate
students
.
In addition
, the figures for unemployment of final
students
 was approximately over 16
thousand
, equivalent to over a tenth of the figure for graduates.
Moreover
, the number of
graduate
students
 participating in volunteer work was 2.5
thousand
, which was higher than that of professors, with only 345.
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