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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selectng and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selectng and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart informs the reasons of agricultural
land
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 becomes less productive which is divided into four categories.
Also
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, the table depicts the regions
suffered
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that suffered
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land
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degradation
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 in three
continental
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continents
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 namely North America,
Europe
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, and
Ocenia
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Oceania
 during the 1990s. Generally, the global main reason for
land
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degradation
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 was
over-grazzing
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over-grazing
,
while
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apply
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the
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Europe
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 suffered the highest total
land
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degradation
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. Looking at the proportion of causes of
land
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degradation
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 globally, a lot of animals and
reducing
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reduced
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 trees made
of
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up
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 65 per
cent
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,
represent
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representing
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 35 per
cent
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 and 30 per
cent
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 respectively. Meanwhile, over-cultivation comprised 28 per
cent
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 of worldwide
land
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degradation
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,
then
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 other factors accounted for 7 per
cent
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. Turning to
table
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the table
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 data,
Europe
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became
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had
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 the highest
land
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 degraded among
others continent
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other continents
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. As regards the breakdown of causes of
land
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degradation
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 in
Europe
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, deforestation was the main reason with 9.8 per
cent
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. Meanwhile, Oceania took the second place
of
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as
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region
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the region
a region
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 that suffered
land
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degradation
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 with the main reason
was
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being
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 over-grazing. North America accounted for 5 per
cent
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 of
land
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degradation
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 with over-
culvitation
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cultivation
became
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becoming
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main
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the main
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 rea
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words land, degradation, europe, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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