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The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The chart given illustrates estimated global
illiteracy
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 rates in various territories and two genders in 2000. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident that the percentage of
illiteracy
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 in females higher than that of males in over the world.
In addition
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, the South
Asia
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 region had the highest
illiteracy
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 proportion in both genders, developed countries,
however
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, accounted for the lowest value. In terms of women, the
illiteracy
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 percentage in South
Asia
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 was highest, at about 55%. The data on Arab States and Sub-Saharan Africa were lower, at 53% and nearly 50%, respectively.
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, East Asian/Oceanian female individuals who did not enjoy education came from occupied about 20% and over 10% of the total population, in turn, compared to over 10% for Latin America/Caribbean and just only 1% for developed nations.
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, the
illiteracy
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 rate of men in South
Asia
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 was about 33%, meanwhile, the figures for Arab States and Sub-Saharan Africa were somewhere in the vicinity of 30%.
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, the proportion of male residents who did not take part in school in East
Asia
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/Oceania and Latin America was approximately 9% and about 10%, in the given order.
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, the data on developed countries was lowest, at just over 0%.
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