The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year.

The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year.
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The information about the choices of youngsters in terms of transportation in four different countries is depicted by the given bar graph.
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, the most striking feature of the given chart is that young adults in three countries except France prefer
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car
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cars
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over other vehicles,
while
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except
the
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in the
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United States,
motorcycle
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the motorcycle
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is the least used mode of transportation. Taking a cursory glance, it can be clearly manifested that 60%
citizens
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of citizens
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of the UK and the United States
travels
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travel
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by
car
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whereas
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30%
commutes
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commute
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by bicycle and only 10% use
motorcycle
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a motorcycle
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for travelling in the UK. In the US,
this
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trend is exactly
opposite
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the opposite
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where 30%
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of uses
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uses
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users
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are motorbikers and 10 % are bicyclists.
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,
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car
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cars
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and
bicycle
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bicycles
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have
comaparable
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comparable
trends where the former settles at around 40% and the latter at 45% respectively.
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, people in Italy
loves
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to drive
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car
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cars
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;
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they are highest among all other countries with a percentage at just above 70%, whilst bikers and cyclists are negligible in
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apply
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comparison.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words car with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • transport preferences
  • young people
  • countries
  • specific year
  • most popular
  • mode of transport
  • car
  • public transport
  • cycling
  • walking
  • significant variations
  • preferred
  • least favored
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