The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015.

The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015.
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Mauritius adolescents consumed three different kinds of fast food over a period of 30
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, from 1985 to 2015.
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it is clear that
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hamburgers increased the most significantly in the period.
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fried chicken started at the lowest point and gradually went up, the opposite was true for fish and chips, which witnessed a rapid reduction. In 1985, there was only an average of 5
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one teenager had chosen pizza in one year, the same trend applied to hamburgers which were a mere 2 per cent higher. Over the next five
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, both categories increased gradually, the number of
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and hamburgers consumed were 20 and 40 respectively. Hamburger's figure witnessed a soar in the next five
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hit the highest point in 1995, which was 100
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and stayed stable. Pizza
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grew and reached a peak in
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time, which was over 80
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. As regards the remaining category, fish and chips were the most popular food among teenagers in 1985, a hundred
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per year.
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contained volatile data, saw a fluctuation in 10
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, went down to 84 and rose again in late 1995. After that,
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figure went down dramatically, and reached its lowest point in 2000, remaining at 40
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