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The graph below shows changes in the share of vehicle registrations of the three most common types of commercial vehicles in the US between 1970 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows changes in the share of vehicle registrations of the three most common types of commercial vehicles in the US between 1970 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph illustrates the percentage of how
much
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many
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 people registered
the
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in the
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 three categories in
US
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the US
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 from 1970 to 2010. As is generally seen in the data, 'truck' was mostly the most popular type to register and '
bus
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' was the least preferred throughout the period. 
According to
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 the graph, 'truck', with the highest figure of 48%
ni
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in
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 1970, had a drastic fall of approximately 20% in a decade. After the decrease, the figure rose gradually until the end of the period.
However
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, the proportion of '
bus
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' had a threefold increase from 5% to 15%
in
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at
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 the beginning of the period before descending slowly, which had an opposite trend with the category '
bus
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'. It is interesting to notice that the percentage of '
taxi
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taxis
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' fluctuated between 1970 and 2010. About 24% of people registered the type of vehicle in regard
at
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to
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 the baseline year,
then
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 ascended to around 35% in 10 years. It had the biggest increase of 20% later in the data, after having a marked drop to about 15%.
Additionally
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, it is notable that the ranking was stable except
ni
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in
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 1980, when 'taxi' had a higher ratio than '
bus
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'.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • commercial vehicles
  • vehicle registrations
  • share
  • trend
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • popularity
  • predominant
  • convergence
  • divergence
  • registration shares
  • shifts in preference
  • timeline
  • dramatic increase/decrease
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