This bar chart gives information about rates of Australian male and female of dissimilar ages doing physical activity in 2010.
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bar chart gives information about rates of Australian male
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males
female
of dissimilar ages doing physical Fix the agreement mistake
females
activity
in 2010.
Overall
, the chart shows opposite genres who were more physically active than young adults, but women
after middle age
did more physical activity
than younger women
.
In 2010, 52.8% of Australian men and 47.7% women
aged 15 to 24 participated in physical Change preposition
of women
activity
. While
women
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in
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activity
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ages
activity
levels reduced suddenly in
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age
. Only 39.5% of males aged 35 to 44 did
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regularly
whereas
a much higher percentage of women
in the same age
group 52.5% exercised regularly.
On the other hand
, women
accounted more
than 53% of the group comprising adults aged 45 to 54. But females aged 35 to 64 had a higher rate Change preposition
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