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The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided diagram demonstrates how cutting utilities have changed over the span of 6 million years.
This
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B
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, which illustrate the human development of using each cutting
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. Regarding
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 A, the figure displays three different views of a stone, which include a front, side, and back
view
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. The cutting tools were from 1.4 million years ago, which depicted a range of distinct changes from 0.8 million years ago. Starting with the font
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,
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 A portrayed a
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 narrow shape and a less pointy tip than
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B
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. The comparison of a more circular body in
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B
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 than
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 A
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 is represented by the sturdiness of the
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. Moving to the second side,
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B
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, which indicated a side
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, it was clearly visible that
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B
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 was largely thinner and slimmer than
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 A. It witnessed how humans were evolving to develop lighter tools, which were both easier to hold and throw.
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, the back
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 was very similar to the front
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, but the substantial distinction was shorter than
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 A at merely 3 cm. The edges appeared to be roughly shaped to cut thicker skins and bigger prays.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words b, tool, view with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Stone Age
  • Cutting tools
  • Evolution
  • Flint
  • Chipping
  • Hand axe
  • Sharp edge
  • Craftsmanship
  • Hunting
  • Survival
  • Innovation
  • Cognitive abilities
  • Early humans
  • Technological advancements
  • Tool-making techniques
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