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Write a letter to your neighbor (who is also your friend) about the damage that occurs to your car while he parks his car in the space allotted to you. In the letter, you should: Describe the damage Say how you feel about this problem. Suggest on actions he should take.

#neighbor #friend #damage #car #parks #space #actions
Dear Mr smith, I am writing
this
 letter to let you know that you
had
Wrong verb form
have
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park
Wrong verb form
parked
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 your
car
 in
parking
Correct article usage
the parking
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 space allocated to me. when you parked the
car
in
Change preposition
at
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 night, it damaged my
car
 already
park
Wrong verb form
parked
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 in the parking space. the rear of the
car
 has
damaged
Add a missing verb
been damaged
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 severely. I
feel
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felt
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 really bad when I saw my
car
turned
Wrong verb form
turn
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 up like
this
 in
early
Add an article
the early
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 morning today.
This
 has spoiled my mood, and I am not over to get it. I did not expect that my morning
will
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would
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 turn out to be like
this
. The
car
 has turned out to be really bad in shape. I would expect you to repair my
car
 at the earliest.
As
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apply
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I used the
car
 for
daily
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my daily
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 commute. I enquired about repairing the
car
 from
nearby
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a nearby
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 mechanic shop and he told me that it
will
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would
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 take three days to repair the
car
. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Sincerely, Jim rogers
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure clarity and flow in your paragraphs. Use transition words to better connect your ideas and maintain a logical structure throughout the letter.
Task Achievement
Your letter's opening and closing are appropriately formal, which is good. However, the overall tone of the letter could be more polite and less confrontational to maintain goodwill with your neighbor.
Coherence and Cohesion
Maintain a single idea or point per paragraph for clearer communication. For example, dedicate one paragraph to describe the damage, another to express how you feel, and a third to suggest a resolution.
Task Achievement
To improve task response, make sure your suggestions for action are clear and constructive. Instead of simply stating the expectation for a repair, provide more detail or suggest collaborating on finding a solution.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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