Some people say that parents should place restrictions on the hours of their children spend watching TV and playing computer games, and encourage them to spend this time reading books instead. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, it is increasingly common to find teenagers playing video
games
and watching TV throughout the world. Use synonyms
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, they can experience negative influences of Linking Words
this
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in most cases. Correct your spelling
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why parents should set Linking Words
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on the hours of their children's Correct your spelling
limitations
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as well as
stimulate them to read Linking Words
books
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instead
.
On the one hand, more and more youngsters are becoming addicted to wasting most of their precious time Linking Words
to
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on
unneccery
things. Correct your spelling
unnecessary
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watching
waiting
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kinds
games
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because of
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that
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they
can cause detrimental effects on their health Correct pronoun usage
apply
such
as mental diseases, shapeless frameworks of their bones, a blood pressure, diminishing memory and Linking Words
also
eyesight. Linking Words
Besides
, as they are engaged in doing just like Linking Words
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activities, they are seen to lose contact with their family members, relatives and fellows. Correct determiner usage
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This
means that they come across difficulties socializing and making new friends. Another negative impact is that cyber Linking Words
games
and TV programs can distract youngsters from academic improvement. Use synonyms
As a result
, they may be disappointed with Linking Words
their
results they are achieving. Which definitely Change the word
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the level of happiness and Correct your spelling
affect
affects
self-cofidence
negatively.
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self-confidence
On the other hand
, it is certainly true that reading Linking Words
books
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, especially
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. The first positive side of reading is that Use synonyms
people
can enhance their reasoning skills and broaden their Use synonyms
horizon
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horizons
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because, the more Linking Words
books
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people
read, the more life experience they Use synonyms
posesess
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possess
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books
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fewer
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novels
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books
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people
boost their memory significantly and it can make their time much more productive.
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games
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