IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

You are experiencing financial problems and want to ask your landlord if you can pay your rent late. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter explain: Why you cannot pay the rent When you will pay the rent. • How you will ensure you can pay your rent in the future

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Dr. Mr Smith I hope
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 email finds you in radiant health and you are doing well. I am writing
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 letter to get proper information about my rent late payment because of financial problems. It is widely recognized that there is a significant reason why I can not take my salary yet. It is
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 that the company which I am working
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 not give
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employees their salaries
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 month.
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, I am going to ask
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you
that
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if
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 I will pay
rent
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the rent
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of
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for
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 your
appartment
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apartment
 next month. The intention of revealing
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 statement shows that I think, my company will be paid salaries on time in the future and I do not have issues related to money. Namely, I will try to pay rent
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 without delay. Thank you for considering my request. I am looking forward to replying
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 soon. Yours faithfully Anne Frank

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structuration
Your letter is structured in a logical way, but could benefit from clearer paragraphing to separate the greeting, body content, and closing more distinctly. Additionally, consider adding a brief introduction sentence after the greeting to provide a smoother transition into the main content.
formality
While your greeting and closing are appropriate, ensure that you address your landlord more formally, like 'Dear Mr. Smith' instead of 'Dr. Mr Smith'. Also, 'Yours faithfully' is correctly used with 'Dear Sir/Madam'. When using the landlord's name, it's more suitable to close with 'Yours sincerely'.
clarity
You have communicated the main points required by the task. However, your explanation of why you cannot pay the rent is somewhat vague. Offer more specific details about your situation to enhance clarity. For example, mention the specific challenges your company faces that prevent salary payments.
tone
The letter's tone is mostly suitable, given the context of a formal request to a landlord. To further refine it, maintain consistency in formality throughout, avoid colloquial expressions, and use specific dates or time frames when mentioning when you'll pay the rent and how you will ensure timely payments in the future.
future planning
You've mentioned the key reasons and future assurances well, yet more detailed planning on your part to ensure future payments would strengthen your argument. For instance, discuss any measures you might take like saving a portion of your earnings or seeking additional income sources to avoid similar situations.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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