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the diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. write at least 150 words

the diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. write at least 150 words
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There are two pictures showing the plan for the central library 20 years ago and the actual floor today. The function and placement of the rooms are different,
also
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 the furniture inside. The library now has more rooms than it was planned before. Two decades ago, there were three rooms inside, which were a reading
room
 on the left side of the entrance,
computer
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a computer
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 and CDs
room
 across the reading
room
, and a children's
books
room
 on the far
right
. Nowadays, the library has a computer
room
 placed on the left of the entrance and a cafe on the
right
 side. If we walk inside, we can see the children’s fiction
room
 on the left and the lecture
room
 on the
right
. We can see that the children’s
room
 is bigger now than it was planned. Adult fiction
books
 are now located in the
right
 corridor, placed with an information desk and three self-service machines. It was placed in the left corridor before and the opposite side is used to store the non-fiction
books
. Nowadays, the left corridor is functioning as a shelf for reference
books
.
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