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The graph below shows the number of tourists of visiting a particular Carribean Island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists of visiting a particular Carribean Island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line graph outlines the comparative data of the
tourists
 who visited a
Carribean
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Caribbean
island
 from 2010 to  2017. The data is measured in
millions
, and it can be split into two periods, before and after the year
of
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2016.
Overall
, it is immediately apparent that there are considerable changes in the total number of travellers who
stayed
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 on cruise ships and islands. Eventually, the figure experienced a higher number of people staying on
island
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the island
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 than on ships. Regarding the previous 2016, having
a
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start
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started
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 at 1 million
on
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the
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total
of
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tourists
 from both
accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
 in 2010, The popularity of choosing cruise ships was surpassed by the figure of travelling on the
island
, which grew dramatically to 1.5
millions
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million
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 in 2013. Ultimately, the selection of tour
boat
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boats
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 levelled off just under 0.6, rebounding to merely 1.2
millions
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million
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. During the year
of
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2015, the average types of staycation had intersected substantially
aproximately
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approximately
at
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1.5
millions
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million
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 visitors.
According to
graph
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the graph
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 after 2016, 3.5
millions
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million
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of
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tourists
 had reached a peak throughout 2017, which witnessed the most substantial growth in ship trips from 1.6 to 2.
Similarly
,
tourists
 who had chosen to visit the
island
 dropped marginally but there was a period of stability at 1.5.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, island, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "substantially" was used 2 times.
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