the number of students that read books for fun has dropped dramatically in recent years.What are the reasons and how can we encourage children to read more?

In recent days, young people have lost the appetite to read
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for pleasure.
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technology has
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to many students opting to stay on their phones than reading
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we can limit them to mobile and gadgets that can give them access to
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. Currently, more students spend time on
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their
phones and laptops. By so doing they dont find time to read hardcopies.
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to look up
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a story, magazine, newspaper or an interesting article online, just as long as you
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.
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, online articles prove to be
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than buying a book from the store.
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them access to the internet. To avoid
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their gadgets and remove access to games, explicit content and other websites that can divert their attention.
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will encourage them to read more frequently from the devices they spend much time on.
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book
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Sharon and Simon is now available for mobile
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their phones and
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. In conclusion, the use of gadgets has removed the mentality of reading in young
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the ability to download
books
can be an incentive to reading more
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it will be for fun or for exams.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dramatically
  • leisure reading
  • digital distractions
  • reduced attention span
  • academic pressure
  • exposure
  • digital learning resources
  • interactive activities
  • diverse book selections
  • ebooks and audiobooks
  • reading preferences
  • role models
  • conducive
  • well-equipped
  • underprivileged communities
  • mobile libraries
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