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the number of students that read books for fun has dropped dramatically in recent years.What are the reasons and how can we encourage children to read more?

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In recent days, young people have lost the appetite to read
books
 for pleasure.
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Improved
 technology has
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 to many students opting to stay on their phones than reading
books
.
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 we can limit them to mobile and gadgets that can give them access to
internet
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. Currently, more students spend time on
thier
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their
 phones and laptops. By so doing they dont find time to read hardcopies.
For instance
, it
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 to look up
for
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a story, magazine, newspaper or an interesting article online, just as long as you
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.
In addition
, online articles prove to be
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 than buying a book from the store.
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Availability
 of
such
 products that
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 them access to the internet. To avoid
this
, we can download
books
 for them
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 their gadgets and remove access to games, explicit content and other websites that can divert their attention.
This
 will encourage them to read more frequently from the devices they spend much time on.
For example
, the
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 book
entiled
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entitled
 Sharon and Simon is now available for mobile
updloads
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uploads
.
This
 will persuade them to get it
in
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 their phones and
read
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read it
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. In conclusion, the use of gadgets has removed the mentality of reading in young
aldults
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adults
while
,
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 the ability to download
books
 can be an incentive to reading more
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often
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 it will be for fun or for exams.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dramatically
  • leisure reading
  • digital distractions
  • reduced attention span
  • academic pressure
  • exposure
  • digital learning resources
  • interactive activities
  • diverse book selections
  • ebooks and audiobooks
  • reading preferences
  • role models
  • conducive
  • well-equipped
  • underprivileged communities
  • mobile libraries
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