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This line chart diagram depicts that the number of teenagers in UK follow habit of eating vegetables.

This line chart diagram depicts that the number of teenagers in UK follow habit of eating vegetables.
This
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 line chart depicts the figure of teenagers who follow the habit of eating
vegetables
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 in the United Kindom. It is clear from the graph that , there were fluctuations in per percentage eating
vegetables
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 by people under 18 years old in the UK in the period between 1960 to 2020.
According to
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 what is shown,there was a high increase from started in 1960 to 1980 by 15% in eating
vegetables
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then
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 dropped sicnifintaly of by 10 per cent in the interval 1981 to 1990 after that up and down between 1991 to 2005
then
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 a constant of the number eating
vegetables
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at the end
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 2020.
To sum up
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, we could say that, the number in the
last
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 10 years is the level of teenagers eating
vegetables
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 in the UK.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vegetables with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "depicts" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • depicts
  • trend
  • fluctuations
  • speculate
  • dietary recommendations
  • implications
  • health awareness
  • external factors
  • government policies
  • educational programs
  • advertising
  • consumption
  • stability
  • statistical data
  • notable changes
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