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The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides information about the
sales
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 rates of major cell phone brands between 2006 and 2012. There are three clear trends visible in the data.
Firstly
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,
Apple
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 and Samsung increased constantly, with Samsung finishing at the highest level of
sales
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overall
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 at 396.5
million
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.
While
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Apple
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 made the lowest amount of
sales
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 at the start, with a mere 2.3
million
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 in 2007,
this
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 soared to just over 136
million
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 by the end of the
period
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, putting
Apple
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 in the third-highest position. Motorola and Ericsson saw an
overall
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 decline, reaching the same number of
sales
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 in 2012. The figure for Ericsson by 2007 had risen by about 28
million
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, hitting a peak of its total
period
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, and
then
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 it fell steadily until the end of the
period
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.
However
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, the
sales
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 rate of the Motorola brand fell considerably until 2010. Remaining roughly stable at 40
million
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,
then
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 it declined again, reaching 28
million
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 mobile phones sold. Regarding Nokia, it started at 345
million
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sales
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 in 2006, rising to 475
million
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 after the next two years, reaching the peak of the total
period
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.
Furthermore
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, the figure fluctuated wildly, ending at 335
million
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sales
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, making it the second most popular item in the
last
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 year.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 Nokia sold the highest number of mobile phones,
while
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Apple
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's products were the least popular items.
Also
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, it is noticeable that Samsung experienced the most significant increase throughout the
period
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, apple, million, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual sales
  • fluctuations
  • market saturation
  • technological advancements
  • consumer trends
  • brand dominance
  • growth trajectory
  • market share
  • innovations
  • peak sales
  • decline
  • stagnate
  • proliferate
  • exponential growth
  • market dynamics
  • forecast
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